Writing Glitch #2

For an explanation of what these “writing glitches” are about, read this.

Here, have another glitch:

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I don’t know why the moon isn’t normally capitalized (although it’s not actually incorrect to do so), but if you’re referring to the planet instead of to dirt, you need to capitalize Earth. Yes, even you over there.

One day a black dot appears on the moon. Over the course of two months, the dot slowly engulfs the entire moon in blackness. You are the first to notice a similar dot on Earth.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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2 Responses to Writing Glitch #2

  1. What really got my attention was the unnecessary addition of the word “slowly”. The first half of the sentence already told us exactly how fast it happened.

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  2. Sheron says:

    Good one. So many moons but one Earth.

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