Writing Glitch #7

Today’s glitch:

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Yes, there’s a typo in the first line. (A couple of letters swapped is usually just a typographical error rather than the writer not knowing how to spell a common word.) It’s not the only problem here.

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This young woman was from an ordinary family in the village. She lost her parents in an epidemic and is alone. She now works as a traveling trader.

Why no comma before and in the second sentence? Because even though there are two verbs, lost and is, there’s only one subject, she. It’s not a compound sentence.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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One Response to Writing Glitch #7

  1. Sheron says:

    Got it. Also sentence structure needs some variety. Subject/ verb, subject/verb, subject/verb.

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