Writing Glitch #11

Today’s glitch:

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Oh, where to start…?

These, friends, are gen-yoo-ine run-on sentences, with not so much as a comma to direct the flow. Kinda ugly, ain’t they?

Turns out becoming a ghost after you die is a real thing. However, it takes years of practicing before you can actually communicate with the living world. By the time you have it figured out, it has been several generations, and you decide to try to contact one of your descendants.

Kudos, though, to the person who came up with this one for writing try to contact rather than try and contact.

I do think the last sentence would work better this way: By the time you have it figured out, several generations have come and gone, and you decide to try to contact one of your descendants. The original wording isn’t wrong, but it is awkward.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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