Writing Glitch #24

Today’s glitch:

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The dash (hyphen pretending to be a dash) ought to be a period instead. The other errors are all about commas.

They started out as a group of ten. Within a week, they had lost two. They were hungry, dirty, tired, and weak. Food was scarce, and nerves were beginning to fray.

(Something I feel I ought to point out: although there are multiple uses of to be verbs in this sample, there is no use of passive voice. If you don’t want to take my word for it, try the “zombie test” on it. Can you add by zombies to the end of any of these sentences and have it make sense? No? Then it isn’t passive voice.)

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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