Writing Glitch #27

Today’s (actually yesterday’s) glitch:

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Why, O Internet?? Why do some people randomly capitalize words? *shakes head*

A teenager thinks his dad works in delivery service. He does, but with a difference. He moves bodies — and not dead ones. Sometimes they’re alive; sometimes they’re in between. The kid finds out by accident, and it’s all down hill from there.

I thought keeping the dash after moves bodies was a good idea, since it brings extra attention to the twist that the bodies aren’t dead ones. A comma would also be correct there, if that is preferred, as would a period instead of the semicolon in the next sentence.

Downhill and down hill don’t mean the same thing, by the way, any more than everyday and every day do.

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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6 Responses to Writing Glitch #27

  1. Sheron says:

    Is there a comma after does when the following words are not a sentence? But has no comma when it introduces a phrase, only when it introduces an independent clause.
    Or so I thought.

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    • Sorry I don’t have a precise explanation right now (still “early” in the day for me, and my brain isn’t working yet), but compound sentences aren’t the ONLY time to use a comma after a word such as ‘and’ or ‘but.’

      I’ll get back to you on this later today and try to explain better.

      Like

  2. Sheron says:

    Perhaps there is a comma when it reflects a contrast of thought?

    Like

  3. M Oniker says:

    Random capitalization is wonderful if you are A. A. Milne though.

    You also now have me having anxiety attacks about commas. I know that I’m a chronic abuser of them. Should the comment above have a comma after Milne?

    zomg

    Should Milne in the sentence I just wrote have quotes?

    This could be never-ending.

    I just researched whether there should be a hyphen in never-ending and the results were mixed.

    *goes to take a Xanax*

    I stand by the Milne statement. 🙂

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    • Yes, there should be a comma after “Milne” in that first sentence. (I’m telling you because you asked, not because I proofread comments.)

      If it helps you feel better about your own comma usage, I’m currently reading a very good fantasy novel by an author who often neglects to use a comma to separate “though” from the rest of a sentence where it should be. And one of my favorite authors EVER often didn’t use commas in compound sentences. (I blame Hemingway for being such a bad influence. *suddenly wonders if giant Siamese cats of Chaos have extra toes*)

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