Writing Glitch #62

Today’s glitch:

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Use commas in compound sentences. Do not use apostrophes to make plurals.

The year is 2050, and identifying software has progressed to the point where no passports or IDs are necessary. Your parents were the only ones with the foresight never to upload an image of you to the internet, and so you are the only anonymous person on the planet.

In the last sentence of the original, the words and as such don’t belong. The writer wants them to refer to the POV character, but they actually refers to the parents, and that makes no sense.

I moved the adverb (it’s an adverb — run for your lives! *sarcastic grin*) never because doing so makes the sentence flow more smoothly, not because I’m rabid about avoiding split infinitives.

I don’t believe only one couple in all the world would have refrained from putting pictures of their kid online. Maybe the POV character doesn’t know of anyone else with true anonymity, but they’d have to exist somewhere. Also, merely not having your photograph on the internet wouldn’t make you anonymous; it would simply make you untraceable by the identifying software.

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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One Response to Writing Glitch #62

  1. MishaBurnett says:

    That’s basically the plot of Roger Zelany’s “My Name Is Legion”.

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