Writing Glitch #69

Today’s glitch:

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He possessed a magic belt that, when worn, could transform him into a werewolf.

Again, the reason for the placement of the commas is to set apart a phrase that could be removed without making the rest of the sentence grammatically incorrect. (See me avoiding jargon as much as possible.) It would make sense to say He possessed a magic belt that could transform him into a werewolf; it would not make sense to say He possessed a magic belt could transform him into a werewolf. (Maybe you don’t see the difference, but if that’s the case, I don’t know how to help you.)

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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