Writing Glitch #76

Today’s glitch:


You could almost forget everything in the snow. The radiation, for example.

Yes, the second sentence is actually a sentence fragment. No, I don’t think it needs to be “corrected.” Standardized grammar and punctuation exist for the sake of clarity, and if the meaning isn’t lost or impeded by the use of an incomplete sentence, or if it is actually enhanced by that, keep the incomplete sentence.

On the other hand, you really do need the comma after radiation.


About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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One Response to Writing Glitch #76

  1. The radiation for example. Yes, is simply annoying the lack of comma, you can’t not see it!
    The forgotten commas particulary annoy me because I know many many people who write without ANY puntuation signs. And then, they pretend you to magically understand it!

    Off of the theme of the conversation, the phrase makes me remember of El eternauta, an Argentinian comic. It begins with a radioactive snow that starts killing people. Funny coincidence!

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