Always capitalize the name of your home planet… or someone else’s, for that matter. (Why would anyone not do that?)
The verb tenses are mixed up, but present tense is used more, so that’s what I’ve gone with for the whole thing.
Don’t use quotation marks around unfamiliar/invented terminology.
I recall reading somewhere that prepositions are the most difficult part of English to get right, not only for people learning English as a second language but also for native speakers. This does a lot to explain why expressions such as on accident are so common even though they’re incorrect. One may do something on purpose, but only by accident.
Everyone on Earth has a brain buddy. Half the time you hear their thoughts, and half the time they hear yours. Nobody ever realizes this or meets their brain buddy until you find yours by accident.
(Mercenary Proofreader would like to point out that this is not how mindlinks actually work. 🙂 )