For some reason, the image for today’s writing glitch isn’t loading, so I’ll just tell you:
“Your day of making is upon you, you will change this world like no one before you, and few after…”
That’s the original version. It contains a comma splice (a comma where some form of end punctuation is needed instead) after upon you and an extra comma after before you. Also, it should end in a period instead of an ellipsis.
Here’s the corrected version:
“Your day of making is upon you. You will change this world like no one before you and few after.”
Even though the ellipsis doesn’t belong at the end, I’m irrationally pleased that it was at least a real ellipsis with the correct number of dots.