Writing Glitch #174

Extra homework on Friday — mwahahaha… 🙂

Have another glitch:

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You know what this one is about, don’t you? *evil editor grin*

No one can smile any words at all, ever. Do not use smiled the way you’d use said.

“I’ll only have one shot.”

“Good.” He smiled. “One shot is all you need.”

If you want the speech and the smile to happen together, write it this way: “Good,” he said, smiling.

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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5 Responses to Writing Glitch #174

  1. Thank you for writing about annoying dialogue tags. They conjure up bizarre images. “She hissed.” “He growled.” These are okay if it’s Sally the snake or Benny the bear doing the talking.

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  2. Huh? Never thought about that. Thank you. I learned something new today. 🙂

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  3. That was too easy! Or maybe it just seemed that way as it’s something I was guilty of. Note the was. It took a long time to fix but I did it. 🙂

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