Writing Glitch #186

Today’s glitch:

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Want to see how a comma splice can be made into a correct sentence without changing the punctuation at all? Look at what happens when I delete was from the first sentence here:

She was looking forward to the midwinter holiday, the festival in honour of their ancestors.

Now the festival in honour of their ancestors becomes a nonrestrictive appostional phrase (eep! arghh! jargon…!) explaining/expanding on midwinter holiday, rather than a separate (and bland) sentence requiring a period before The festival.

Notice that midwinter is not hyphenated.

The last comma in the second sentence needs to go away:

It would start with a blessing ceremony, an item hunt, and then gift-giving and playing games.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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2 Responses to Writing Glitch #186

  1. As usual, you are spot-on in identifying writing glitches. Thanks for sharing.
    P.S. I also appreciate your use of appropriate vocabulary, i.e., “nonrestrictive appositional phrase”

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  2. So like your puzzles :-). I would have put a period after holiday and started a new sentence. I never thought about a nonrestrictive appositional phrase.

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