Writing Glitch #221

Today’s glitch:

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A compound sentence needs a comma, yadda yadda yadda…

She looked down at her blood-stained hands, and a small giggle rose up in her throat. “Who could’ve guessed?” she laughed. “Killing is so much fun!”

Do you want an explanation of why the first sentence is compound? In the first half, the subject is she, and the verb is looked; in the second half, the subject is giggle, and the verb is rose. Each part has its own subject and its own verb; you could write the sentence as two shorter sentences if you wanted to, just by deleting the conjunction and replacing the comma before it with a period: She looked down at her blood-stained hands. A small giggle rose up in her throat.

(WordPress’ spell check insists could’ve is not a real word; it says would’ve is the correct replacement. Mercenary Proofreader would like to know who the hell programs this thing to be so stupid.)

 

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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