Writing Glitch #268

You’re getting two today because I’m in the middle of an editing job and may be too busy tomorrow to post anything.

Today’s first glitch:

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This one contains a comma splice… but where, exactly? One part in the middle, though she didn’t utter a word, could belong to either the first sentence or the second.

From that first glance, he knew his sister had been wounded. Though she didn’t utter a word, the look on her face spoke volumes. They were sitting ducks, helpless.

You could also write it this way: From that first glance, he knew his sister had been wounded, though she didn’t utter a word. The look on her face spoke volumes. They were sitting ducks, helpless.

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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