Writing Glitch #307

Today’s glitch:

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Add a comma after spread (compound sentence).

A wizard decides to break the rules and use his magic in the human world to help the poor and less fortunate. Word starts to spread, and he begins to attract a lot of unwanted attention.

I dislike the implication that wizard and human are mutually exclusive terms. Are wizards a separate species in this setting? How strange — wizard usually just refers to an occupation. An author has the right to make up anything they want for a work of fiction, but a reader has the right to object to anything that lacks at least some vague explanation in the worldbuilding to back it up. Perhaps this is merely a case of a writer choosing their words poorly, though.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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One Response to Writing Glitch #307

  1. I’d also like to point out there shouldn’t be a space between the last in in “fortunate” and the period. 😁

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