Writing Glitch #309

Today’s glitch:

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Get rid of the comma after world.

In a lonely shack on the very edge of the world lives an old lady who mixes the personalities of every person on Earth.

Mixes has the potential to be misunderstood here. Does she literally mix the personalities up in a bowl in her kitchen or something and prepare them for the people who will receive them, or is her own personality a combination of all the other personalities in the world?

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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6 Responses to Writing Glitch #309

  1. M. Oniker says:

    Oh boy. I would have kept the comma in and added another. “In a lonely shack, on the very edge of the world, lives an old lady who mixes the personalities of every person on Earth.”

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  3. curioushart says:

    “She’s a little mixed up but she’s feelin’ so fine.”

    On Sun, Feb 12, 2017 at 6:58 PM, North of Andover wrote:

    > Thomas Weaver posted: “Today’s glitch: Get rid of the comma after world. > In a lonely shack on the very edge of the world lives an old lady who mixes > the personalities of every person on Earth. Mixes has the potential to be > misunderstood here. Does she literally mix the per” >

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