Writing Glitch #314

Today’s glitch:

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The many creatures are listed after the word creatures. Replace the period with a colon and don’t capitalize thousands.

Use italics for emphasis, not asterisks.

I’m leaving Her capitalized because it appears to be used as a proper name rather than a pronoun here.

The Swamp of Sorrows is home to many creatures: thousands of insects, hundreds of amphibians, dozens of mammals, and Her.

I do wonder if the many creatures are actually many species of creatures. Thousands doesn’t seem all that many when you’re talking about insects, because you can easily have thousands in a single gnat swarm, for example. Nor, for that matter, is hundreds a lot when you’re talking about amphibians. I’ve seen mere farm ponds that were home to hundreds of amphibians… A swamp with only hundreds of amphibians is rather pathetic, as swamps go. What if we change the numbers? The Swamp of Sorrows is home to many creatures: millions of insects, thousands of amphibians, dozens of mammals, and Her.

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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