Writing Glitch #315

Today’s glitch:

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As it is currently, without a comma after universe, this sentence is saying that the shack turns out to be a door while the hooligans are about to find out. *shakes head* Add the comma.

An abandoned shack turns out to be a door into another universe, as a band of local hooligans is about to find out.

Sometimes I really don’t like these writing prompt things I use for most of my “glitch” posts. The verb tenses (people who create the prompts seem overly fond of present tense but unable to keep it straight) are often awkward and unclear… Try past tense instead: An abandoned shack turned out to be a door into another universe, as a band of local hooligans found out.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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2 Responses to Writing Glitch #315

  1. curioushart says:

    Well, your comment about the shack and the hooligans really gave me a chuckle.

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  2. Ah, writing prompts. I wondered about the present tense. It reminded me of pick-your-own-adventure books from my youth.

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