Writing Glitch #337

Today’s glitch:


(Yeah, they did it back in the 80s and 90s, too. That’s why flaring one’s aura in public is a bad idea. ūüėõ )

Mercenary Proofreader is well aware that certain words are capitalized in writing by/for, say, military personnel or government officials. However, this is not standard. Don’t capitalize recruitment officers.

A comma was added after districts because what comes afterward is a nonrestrictive¬†dependent clause following the main clause. (You can read about this in The Chicago Manual of Style, section 6.31, if you want a little more information. Honestly, I usually only use that book to look up jargon or to find a clear way to explain this stuff to other people, but it is better than relying on Strunk and White¬†for everything, y’know?)

Recruitment officers patrol the school districts, looking for children who radiate an unusual brightness.

About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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One Response to Writing Glitch #337

  1. curioushart says:

    I bless all of your comma comments‚Äďthey are really helpful when I edit my writing.

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