Writing Glitch #340

Today’s glitch:

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This example contains a comma splice (two sentences joined by a comma).

You’ve got two options here: you can replace the comma with a period and begin a new sentence (don’t forget to capitalize It as the first word of the second sentence!), or you can replace the comma with a semicolon, because in this example, the two sentences are closely related.

The use of a semicolon versus the use of a period does have some effect on the flow of the sentence/sentences. Two shorter sentences will have a more choppy/abrupt feel than one sentence with a semicolon in the middle. Which you choose depends on the result you want.

Every morning she woke in agony; it had been this way for as long as she could remember.

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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4 Responses to Writing Glitch #340

  1. curioushart says:

    I noticed you changed “awoke” to “woke.” What is the difference between those two words, besides the “a”?

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