Writing Glitch #341

Today’s glitch:

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Everyday and every day do not mean the same thing!

Also, you don’t need a comma after future. You would if you moved every day at noon to the beginning of the sentence, though: Every day at noon, you find a door in the bathroom at work that turns into a portal to the future. (I changed you find out to you find because, after this happens once or twice, you’re not rediscovering the fact of the portal each time you see it.)

Notice how the emphasis and meaning of the sentence is changed somewhat because of this rearrangement and minor rewording. Before, the emphasis was on the discovery of this portal; when it opens is secondary. The changed version is about there being a portal each day.

Here’s the corrected version of the original wording:

You find out that a door in the bathroom at work turns into a portal to the future ever day at noon.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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2 Responses to Writing Glitch #341

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  2. it is interesting how the change of words affect my reading of it. i find the first version more dramatic, and fed me information piecemeal, leading to a climax. whilst the second edit just reads very dull. am i the only one who finds it so?

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