Writing Glitch #344

Today’s glitch:

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Get rid of the comma after inside a dream; this is an example of a sentence with a compound predicate (more than one verb with the same subject: You, in this case), which normally does not need a comma to separate the verbs. (Occasionally a comma is required for clarity, but don’t use one otherwise.)

Rather than change the em-dash after fact to a period and begin a new sentence (which would be correct, too), I changed the em-dash to a comma and added as before the second you.

Spell out numbers: five hundred, not 500. (Yes, it’s a number of years. No, that doesn’t mean it should be written with numerals the way you’d write a date.)

You are trapped inside a dream and fully aware of this fact, as you have been for the five hundred years you’ve been living here.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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2 Responses to Writing Glitch #344

  1. curioushart says:

    I can’t resist. No, I actually can resist, but I won’t. This dreamer–is he row, row, rowing his boat gently down the stream?

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  2. I had never heard of compound predicate until today. Thanks for sharing this 🙂

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