Writing Glitch #385

Today’s glitch:

In US English, an organization is construed as a single entity, so we use the third-person singular verb, is.

The name of the organization could be written as Villains’ Union, although not using the apostrophe seems more common; Villains Union means a union of villains, rather than a union that belongs to villains. Either way, Villains needs to be capitalized if you’re going to capitalize Union, indicating that this is the actual name of the organization.

Change the colon after strike to either a period or a semicolon.

Add a comma after jobs. Without the comma, the sentence is saying that the jobs themselves are compensating for the lack of people to save, whereas adding a comma makes it say the heroes need jobs because there aren’t enough people to save. (Honestly, the sentence could have been worded better, and then we wouldn’t have to worry if the meaning was clear or not.)

The Villains Union is on strike. Heroes are forced to find jobs, to compensate for the lack of people to save.

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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One Response to Writing Glitch #385

  1. curioushart says:

    So if you want to be a hero, don’t quit your day job.

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