Writing Glitch #406

Today’s glitch:

Delete it from the first sentence. (The part between the commas is a nonrestrictive clause, a clause that could be left out without changing the basic meaning of the sentence. That means you have to make sure the rest of the sentence is grammatically correct even if you remove the nonrestrictive clause. You wouldn’t write, You find a phone app that it reveals a single secret they hide.)

Add a comma after name in the second sentence. 

You find an app for your phone that, when you type in the name of a person, reveals a single secret they hide. To your surprise, when you type in your own name, there is a secret that even you didn’t know.

You can delete that from the last part of the second sentence if you want.


About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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