Writing Glitch #422

Today’s glitch:

Did you spot the typo in the first line?

Single-handedly is a compound adverb and needs to be hyphenated, the same as you’d do with a compound adjective. (There is a rule against using hyphens with adverbs, but it applies to an adverb before another word.)

Add a comma after life.

Either end the second sentence with a period (the better choice) or use a real ellipsis (not that truncated thing).

Your trusted friend killed you and took the credit for single-handedly defeating the greatest evil and saving the world. As you lay dying, you hear a voice offering you a second chance at life, on one condition.

I feel as if there’s a word or two missing from the first sentence (the greatest evil what?), but I cannot think of anything specific to add.

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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3 Responses to Writing Glitch #422

  1. What if they spelled trusted right and dropped the “the” in the first sentence. It is awkward and hard to read. That adjustment helps a little.

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    • If I understand correctly, the change you’re suggesting is this: “Your trusted friend killed you and took the credit for single-handedly defeating greatest evil and saving the world.” I think that would work if you changed “greatest” to “great.”

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