Writing Glitch #434

Today’s glitch:

Whether or not the comma belongs in the first sentence depends on whether Now is intended as an adverb (look now rather than later) or as a mild interjection/interrupter. If the former is intended, delete the comma.

Change the comma after people to a period. 

“Now, look at what you’ve done! You’ve ruined my favorite suit! You can’t just go around poking holes in people. It’s very impolite.”

(I freely admit that I like this particular example because it reminds me somewhat of a short paragraph in The Fallen, my twin’s second novel: “The man blinked and looked down at the blade embedded in his chest. ‘That was inexcusably rude.'”)

 

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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3 Responses to Writing Glitch #434

  1. curioushart says:

    Your comment is also helpful in that it shows an example of quotes within quotes within parentheses.

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  2. I was thinking of the game Portal.

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