Writing Glitch #472

Today’s glitch:

Because the words function together as a single adjective before a noun, long-forgotten needs to be hyphenated.

Civilization has ended millennia ago? Um… no. Change that to just civilization ended.

After already mentioning that this character is the last human on Earth, you don’t need to say it again in the very next sentence. Change the second one to and that she’s all alone or something like that.

An ellipsis has three dots, not two (even for the last human on Earth).

I am irrationally pleased that the writer of this example capitalized Earth

Get rid of the comma after see. (Why would anyone put a comma there? *shakes head*)

After a long-forgotten experiment, the last human on Earth awakes from her cryogenic sleep. She soon realizes that civilization ended millennia ago and that she’s all alone, so she commits suicide… only to see that Heaven and Hell are already closed.

 

 

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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