Review: The Immorality Clause, by Brian Parker

Given the subject matter (the “inciting incident” is the murder of a customer at a sex-bot brothel), I was surprised and pleased by the lack of gratuitous detail in certain scenes. Only once is there a “graphic sex scene” (a recording made by a bot with a customer), but it contains important clues about the murders, so it couldn’t be glossed over, and even then, it’s not as graphic as it could have been. 

Overall, the plot was interesting and did a decent job of holding my attention all the way through, and there were plenty of unexpected (but not illogical) twists along the way. The main character was reasonably relatable, but I read the story to find out “whodunit,” not because I was emotionally invested. The “whodunit” was interesting enough and paced well enough that I’ll probably read the next of these novels (despite my suspicion that the subject matter in that one is going to annoy me).

And now, the stuff I’m not supposed to mention… Although the writing is pretty darn good in terms of both the “art” side (interesting sentences used to describe interesting setting and plot) and the grammar, the punctuation… leaves something to be desired. Either the editor has no frakkin’ clue how to use commas (among other things), or the author completely chose to ignore her input in that area, but an average of three or four punctuation errors per page is far too many.

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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