Writing Glitch #607

Today’s glitch:

I dislike exclamation points in narration, and most readers (and literary agents, acquisitions editors from publishing houses, and so forth) don’t like them, either. An exclamation point in narration is a blatant “telling” device, since it tells the reader, This sentence is exciting! Save the exclamation points for dialogue, and even there, use them sparingly.

Change Renaissance Age to the Renaissance. (If you don’t even know the correct name for it, you probably shouldn’t be writing about it.)

Because it is used as a compound adjective, and because leaving it as it is would make it somewhat unclear, hyphenate password-protected.

Get rid of the quotation marks around the network name.

Add a period to the end of the last sentence. (That one should be obvious, shouldn’t it?)

It worked. You traveled back in time to the Renaissance. Jokingly, you turn on your Wi-Fi, only to find a password-protected network named icniV aD.

 

 

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have eight cats. I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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