Writing Glitch #703

Today’s glitch:

I assume they is being used here as a gender-neutral singular pronoun, since the use of life rather than lives indicates there’s only one person involved.

The verb tenses are a bit of a mess. Change have always know (which is wrong under any circumstances — should be known rather than know) to always knew. (You don’t need to keep using had over and over again, and it’s actually better if you don’t. Once you establish, ‘This happened before the rest of the past-tense-narrated story,’ you can leave it alone.)

They had spent all their life trying to prevent the prophecy from coming true. They always knew when they would destroy Earth, but when the day finally came, they were glad to do it.

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About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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