Writing Glitch #742

Today’s glitch:

The first sentence is rather flat, but this example (like nearly every one I use) originated as a writing prompt found on Pinterest, and I don’t expect brilliant narrative voice from those (although competent punctuation and grammar would be nice to see more often). At any rate, there are no errors in the first sentence.

However, the second sentence needs — nay, requires — a comma after said, a period instead of a comma after this, and a period (inside the quotation marks) after here.

I woke up to find a group of men with guns had entered my house.

One of them handed me a pistol and said, “You’ll need this. They’re almost here.”

 

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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