Writing Glitch #757

Today’s glitch:

What we have here is a failure to make the introductory phrase (One of the most powerful hallucinogens in the garden) fit the rest of the sentence. Change the sentence to this: It is one of the most powerful hallucinogens in the garden, and smoking or ingesting the leaves will leave you a mumbling, giggling, screaming, gasping, confused wreck.

Add a comma after However.

When writing the scientific (binomial) name of something, italicize both words but capitalize only the first one: Salvia divinorum. (The writer of this example misspelled the name.)

Add in before herbal remedies.

Add a comma after digestive problems and another after sore throats.

It is one of the most powerful hallucinogens in the garden, and smoking or ingesting the leaves will leave you a mumbling, giggling, screaming, gasping, confused wreck. However, as a member of the sage family, Salvia divinorum is used in cooking and in herbal remedies to treat digestive problems, sore throats, and colds.

(For what it’s worth, ordinary sage — scientific name, Salvia officinalis — is also used to treat digestive problems, sore throats, and colds, and it doesn’t cause hallucinations, etc., plus it’s darn tasty in breakfast sausage and other foods.)

 

 

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About Thomas Weaver

I’m a writer and editor who got into professional editing almost by accident years ago when a friend from university needed someone to copyedit his screenplay about giant stompy robots (mecha). Having discovered that I greatly enjoy this kind of work, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use ever since as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom. I'm physically disabled, and for the past several years, I’ve lived with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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One Response to Writing Glitch #757

  1. *Salvia apiana* is the variety found in my house. We don’t gather it for it’s medicinal uses. The ex is Native and the daughters use it for smudging.

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