Writing Glitch 910

Today’s glitch:

Change the comma after lives to a period and begin a new sentence with They shared.

Add a comma after dislikes.

Change each the to a.

Get rid of the semicolon after other and replace it with a comma.

You don’t need an ellipsis at the end; there’s no reason for that sentence to trail off.

They were best friends all their lives. They shared common likes and dislikes, but everything changed when one became a detective and the other, a criminal.

This still looks a bit awkward, so I’m going to merge the sentences the right way: They were best friends all their lives, sharing common likes and dislikes, but everything changed when one became a detective and the other, a criminal.

 

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About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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