Writing Glitch 912

Today’s glitch:

Don’t capitalize volcano.

Change the comma after accident to a period.

What does it refer to? The town? The volcano? For clarity, change It has to The volcano has.

Change which is to which are (because properties is plural).

Change life to live.

Hyphenate old-fashioned.

Add a comma after homes.

In the last sentence, change was rumored to is rumored (unless the rumor no longer exists).

This town wasn’t built in a volcano by accident. The volcano has healing properties, which are of great importance to the people who live there. The town itself looks unexciting with its old-fashioned homes, but it has a whimsical atmosphere. The main attraction is the wishing well, which is rumored to have been built many decades ago by a troll.

The words unexciting and whimsical don’t seem quite right, but I cannot ask the writer of the original what they intended, so I can’t say what words would work better to express that.

(WordPress’ spellchecker wants built in to be hyphenated as if it were being used as a compound adjective — it isn’t — and, as always, insists that hyphenate isn’t a word.)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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