Writing Glitch 935

Today’s glitch:

Don’t capitalize sun. (Its proper name is Sol, from which we get solar system — all others are technically stellar systems — and sun is the common noun.)

You can keep the numerals if you want — this example may count as science writing — or you can change the first one to one hundred seventy-four trillion. (Don’t write it as one hundred and seventy-four, because that means 100.74, and don’t hyphenate trillion into the rest.)

Add a comma after mass.

Change the ampersand (that’s the & thing) to and.

Delete the comma after hence.

You can change 1.5 cm to one and a half (or one-point-five) centimeters (or centimetres — the writer of this example obviously prefers UK English spellings, and centimetre goes with tonne instead of ton) if you like.

The sun lost one hundred seventy-four trillion tonnes of mass, and hence the Earth’s orbit increased by one-point-five centimetres.

 

 

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About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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