Writing Glitch 970

Today’s glitch:

Think for a moment about what the words actually say, rather than what they’re most likely intended to say…

As written, the beginning of the first sentence describes the alien spacecraft, not “you” as viewpoint character. However, if the aliens are visiting your grandparents, shouldn’t they have already been there instead of just now landing in the back garden? 🙂

This example can be fixed by adding two words:

While you are visiting your grandparents, a real alien spacecraft lands in the back garden. Your grandpa seems oddly calm about the whole thing.

or

While visiting your grandparents, you see a real alien spacecraft land in the back garden. Your grandpa seems oddly calm about the whole thing.

 

 

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have eight cats. I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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1 Response to Writing Glitch 970

  1. M. Oniker says:

    Look at you, so close to one thousand glitches! 2019 will have that drumroll waiting for you. So many glitches, so much amusing red ink for you to wield. (I almost made the typo of “read ink” which probably would have been more appropriate for the comment.) Best wishes to you for 2019.

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