Writing Glitch 991

Today’s glitch:

The second sentence does not mean what the writer thinks it means… Change They all have bad memories to They all have bad associations or You have bad memories of them. (If you leave it as it is, you’re saying the dogs are the ones who remember bad things.)

Add a comma before and (compound sentence.)

Add a comma after loves dogs (compound sentence).

The last two sentences are potentially confusing because of the different uses of it. I recommend changing these somewhat and merging the sentences into one for the sake of clarity.

You hate dogs. You have bad memories of them from your childhood, and you have tried your best to stay away from them. Your crush loves dogs, however, so you now try your best to get along with your least favorite animal. Their dog refuses to make it easy, almost as if it is trying to get on your nerves.

 

 

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have eight cats. I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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