Writing Glitch 1037

Today’s glitch:

Capitalizing the first word after a comma doesn’t really make that the start of a new sentence. *shakes head*

Change the comma after world to a period… or better yet, combine the second sentence with the first by adding a conjunction.

Add a comma after hunting.

Change the comma after them to a period.

Change it’s to they’re.

It has been years since the alien invasion changed the world and those who remained fled to the mountains. You accidentally broke your glasses while hunting, and you’re very nearsighted without them. Someone finds you and offers help. You’re pretty sure they’re human.

What I like about this example is the (probably unintended) ambiguity: Maybe the POV character is human, or maybe it’s the alien invaders who are. The latter would make an interesting story.

 

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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