Writing Glitch 1038

Today’s glitch:

Normally I’d say you shouldn’t capitalize land, but it worked for Stephen R. Donaldson, didn’t it? If Land is the real, proper-noun name of the place, yes, capitalize it.

Next we run into a problem with verb tenses… If the place is important, you should say that many go there: present tense, not past. If they went there, you should say it was important. Or have gone, which means this happened in the past and is still happening now. The same applies to sought/seek; decide whether you want to the sentence to describe the present or the past, and choose verb tenses accordingly.

Civilizations don’t travel, by the way; people do.

Also, you need a comma after workers.

The Land is an important location. People from many civilizations go there when they seek gold, aromatic resins, wild animals, workers, and more.

Still clunky, but now the “unimportant” stuff such as grammar and punctuation are correct.

 

 

 

 

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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