Writing Glitch 1039

Today’s glitch:

The first sentence is actually three sentences incorrectly comma-spliced together. Where — or whether — you break it up into separate sentences is up to you, but the only way it can remain as a single sentence is if you add and before you really need. (Other options: Add a period after a.m. and another after bed to form three sentences. Or add and before you’ve just, but make the remainder a separate sentence.)

Add a comma after kitchen.

What one of the raccoons says should be in its own paragraph.

It’s six a.m. You’ve just dragged yourself out of bed, and you really need that morning cup of coffee. As you enter the kitchen, you notice a group of raccoons standing upright and looking embarrassed for having intruded.

“Hello. May we ask you a question?”

(This scenario reminds me a bit of the kangaroo and the wombat — actually extraterrestrial police officers in disguise, but whatever — encountered by Fred Cassidy, sci-fi protagonist and perpetual student, during one of his misadventures. It also reminds me of the racoon who used to stand at my kitchen door and ask if my cats could come out to play.)

 

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have six cats. (The preferred term is "Insane Cat Gentleman.") I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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