Writing Glitch 1054

Today’s glitch:

I recommend changing the comma after Wait to a period and starring a new sentence with So, but that isn’t absolutely necessary.

There’s a dot missing from the ellipsis before the question mark. (No, you shouldn’t leave one dot out just because there’s another punctuation mark afterward.)

Also, She trailed off… isn’t a dialogue tag; it’s an associated action (sometimes called a beat, which is confusing because some people call everything other than actual spoken words during a conversation beats). Write it as a separate sentence. (If you want it to be part of the same sentence, write it this way: “Wait. So if this isn’t the poison… where is it…?” she said, trailing off as she looked at the glass from which they’d all just drank.)

“Wait. So if this isn’t the poison… where is it…?” She trailed off as she looked at the glass from which they’d all just drank.

 

 

About Thomas Weaver

For several years, I’ve been putting my uncanny knack for grammar and punctuation, along with an eclectic mental collection of facts, to good use as a Wielder of the Red Pen of Doom (editor). I'm physically disabled, and I currently live with my smugly good-looking twin Paul, who writes military science fiction and refuses to talk about his military service because he can’t. Sometimes Paul and I collaborate on stories, and sometimes I just edit whatever he writes. It's worked out rather well so far. My list of non-writing-related jobs from the past includes librarian, art model, high school teacher, science lab gofer… Although I have no spouse or offspring to tell you about, I do have eight cats. I currently spend my time blogging, reading, editing, and fending off cats who like my desk better than my twin’s.
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