Today’s second glitch:
This one is going to require some rewording in addition to any corrections to grammar and punctuation.
As it is, the introductory phrase in the first sentence (kudos to the creator of this example for using a comma after population) suggests that each person has laws controlling the population. I know that’s not what the writer intended, but that is what the sentence says. So let’s change it to Instead of there being laws controlling the population.
Also, there’s more than one interpretation for controlling the population (does it mean regulating the number of people?), whereas controlling the populace can only mean controlling the people, collectively, who live in this place, so I’m changing that, too.
Change the comma after murder to a semicolon (or a period).
It is unclear what the pronoun they refers to. I’m changing that sentence so it isn’t even an issue.
Your law, whatever it is, isn’t just in the past; it applies now, too, and since the whole example is written in present-tense, was should be is.
Spell out numbers: forty-seven, not 47.
Instead of there being laws to control the populace, each person has laws assigned to them specifically. Some people aren’t allowed to murder; some aren’t allowed to wear green. No one told you what your law is, but you’re forty-seven, and you still haven’t broken it.